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I'm not going to buy my kids an encyclopedia. Let them walk to school like I did.'encyclopedia' sounds like something you could ride to school on. (That's the only reason this quote is notable.)

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Could someone change the phrase "contest only open to members" to "contest only open to paid members" as free account holders are alsoe deemed as "members" according to the rhetoric of the site. very misleading.
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Will it be possible to read the translated text and hear the melody as well? I believe it will be really important. Thank you, Marina
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I like Kris Kristofferson's version the best. It seems to be more in tune with the general mood of the lyrics. Besides, let us not forget that it was Kris Kristofferson who wrote them. :)
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Johnny Cash all the way :
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ED5s1-Fe9FA
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I like the first sentence of the forth paragraph "i've smoked my mind with cigarettes" because it is implicit and comic.
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There are already 2 German versions by well-kown artists. Please see

Volker Lechtenbrink
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-B71AlR_tsc

Peter Maffay
http://www.songtextemania.com/sonntag_morgen_songtext_peter_maffay.html
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Melody is so important in poetry, that I want to stress once more that the author of the newly written text must be given the opportunity to read and record it. Otherwise you're stripped of the most important tool: to give the sound/melody of the text.
Tres grandes versiones (la canción es de Kristofferson)
Johnny Paycheck youtube.com/watch?v=guF_VApn-yU
Willie Nelson youtube.com/watch?v=H3WrsOd_Qng
Kris Kristofferson youtube.com/watch?v=vbqGWTxwZEA
Keep in mind this is a song, therefore the translation should be as succinct as possible. Attempting to capture every word could result in wordiness, which could be interpreted as mistranslation, when in reality it is an adaptation. Rhyme is not critical.
All of three are average 3 के 3 अनुवाद औसत हैं...बल्कि औसत से भी कम
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#1 Sunday Mornin' Comin' Down (10)

#2 Well, I woke up Sunday morning With no way to hold my head that didn't hurt. And the beer I had for breakfast wasn't bad, So I had one more for dessert. (10)

#3 Then I fumbled in my closet through my clothes And found my cleanest dirty shirt. Then I washed my face and combed my hair And stumbled down the stairs to meet the day. (6)

#4 I'd smoked my mind the night before With cigarettes and songs I'd been picking. But I lit my first and watched a small kid Playing with a can that he was kicking. (8)

#5 Then I walked across the street And caught the Sunday smell of someone's frying chicken. And Lord, it took me back to something that I'd lost Somewhere, somehow along the way. (7)

#6 On a Sunday morning sidewalk, I'm wishing, Lord, that I was stoned. 'Cause there's something in a Sunday That makes a body feel alone. (7)

#7 And there's nothing short a' dying That's half as lonesome as the sound Of the sleeping city sidewalk And Sunday morning coming down. (6)

#8 In the park I saw a daddy With a laughing little girl that he was swinging. And I stopped beside a Sunday school And listened to the songs they were singing. (2)

#9 Then I headed down the street, And somewhere far away a lonely bell was ringing, And it echoed through the canyon Like the disappearing dreams of yesterday. (5)